Latest Artwork

[§åm©lü»®]

Here's some of my latest stuff. It's one thing drawing comic art, but to put it in a comic book format - something else.



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8-)Constructive criticism?

[claudox]

Constructive Criticism? You asked for it! ;D

Since im just an amateur myself im not gona lose a word about your drawing skills..(Theyre good by the way )....just one or two things about pencilling a page.

The build-up is quite strange...panel one: if there werent those knifes standing around i couldnt even tell if she is standing in a kitchen or a bathroom....theres just too few to see especially cause the first panel is a great opportunity to give some background information about the character without speaking to much. Just imagine her kitchen...how is it? is it messed up? tidy? very colored? lot of pictures(family pics)? is it big(shes wealthy)? is it real tiny(shes not to wealthy *g*)? you can tell many thing by one a persons kitchen. The view of the panel itself should have the girl looking to the right (into the direction of the other panels), cause thats the direction the readers eye will follow while reading, the way you positined her it seems like the page is meant to be read from right to left.

Panel two: wheres the background? if you have a lot of information about the setup in the first panel you can leave background out of course, but since theres so few to see in panel one and since shes standing in a small room there should at least be SOMEthing on the wall (well cgi helps alot these days i guess)...

beside this the page looks real nice, maybe you shouldnt have wasted so much space for the kitchen panel, this way you would´ve had more space for the other ones.

Oh and by the way, usually you wouldnt draw the speech bubbles directly on the page, art first lettering later.....but since i dont know if you wanna use it for some kind of portfolio, i guess that doesnt matter too much......

Now go back to the drawing table and deliver!!!!!!!!!1

*hehe* Later

[§åm©lü»®]

Thanks Claudox.

That really helps. Didn't think of things like that - size of kitchen, positioning of girl etc. There's a lot to think about.

Have you studied comic art or does it come naturally to you?

[claudox]

Naturally? Hmmm.....not quite i just read a whole lotta "how-to-draw" stuff i guess....maybe naturally but i dont wanna show off *hehe*...im just keeping the really importanrt stuff though since theres also a lotta bull-talk sometimes...if you have like a 1000 rules for drawing, how would you be able to present your own interpretation of a storyline? ......"You wouldnt" is the answer ;D

....like the one with the speech bubbles its maybe a 2 out of 10 in importance...but as a penciller you should be thinking "If i look at this page do i understand whats going on without a spoken word?"

....enough of the smart-assing. So long.....wheres your next page goddammit?

[reiq]

i think the better way to upgrade your skill is just to fell the anatomy. i see some mistake on the chick`s neck. and some charactars lack a more natural style.